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Post by primetime on May 14, 2011 0:57:16 GMT -5
Raw, Angry, Destructive.. that is what Titan has always been. This week, it was more of the same. Titan brings an excitement to the fed and you could feel it brewing with this RP this week. It's a shame that your opponent no-showed. That was a RP worthy of a challenge. Great job.
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James
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Post by James on May 14, 2011 9:40:06 GMT -5
Obi,
I read this last night and I really felt with Titan (maybe because I was personally exacerbated at the same time). You always do an incredible job of showing me the story instead of telling it too me. It's a basic lesson that you learn in elementary school language arts but all too often it's forgotten. The dialogue with Titan is especially fitting, there's no long responses, it's just bare bones. For some characters it seems rather flawed as natural dialogue is not muted sentences but with Titan it fits and adds a dimension to the character and adds a dissimilarity to every one else that makes Titan unique. I love the trash talk bits at the end, they always make me laugh at some point which isn't the intent I think but it does. The last line was awesome this week.
The only thing I will say is sometimes I wish it was interwoven within the frame of the role play instead of tacked on. I felt with Terry Jones it made sense in that he was hyping Titan with his own videos posted on EUW.COM to hype his match, but Barry Jordan to me seems like a different beast ... he wouldn't want to emulate Terry Jones because he ended up next to Rage Rodriguez and Christian Stephens in the unemployment line. That's the one thing I will say going forward is making certain to create a difference in Barry Jordan from Terry Jones.
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Post by primetime on Jun 11, 2011 16:30:17 GMT -5
(My Grades on a 1-10 scale). Dialogue: 10 Description: 8 Content: 8 Length: 9 Match Relevance: 10
Overall Thoughts: TITAN does two things very well. Match Relevance and Dialogue. This period was no exception. I really enjoyed the story. The gritty nature of TITAN is always a must read for me. The cliff hanger at the end was great too. I would like to hear more about TITAN's past though if I could add anything. There is still a lot of mystery there. Either way, the epilogue is where you hit the home run and once again.. you have done just that.
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Post by patera on Jul 8, 2011 20:52:50 GMT -5
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Post by CJ on Aug 16, 2011 17:00:42 GMT -5
Dialogue: 10 Description: 7 Content: 9 Length: 9 Match Relevance: 10 Overall Thoughts: 9/10
Feedback: I will make this short and sweet. I am off work soon, lol. I loved your roleplay! You went a different route per say with the omission of a flashback to TITAN's past. (Good change of pace.) I also enjoyed the first person view as well. Very nice. What I really loved about it all and I applaud you is that you stepped out of your comfort zone and showed TITAN in a different light as he stood up to an abusive parent. Of course, you did it the "TITAN" way but that was what made it great.
Of course, I loved the epilogue. The way TITAN wraps things up at the end is always a must read in my mind. You started off red hot and only became even more of a must read as the RP went on. I want you to know that I felt the TITAN character was becoming a tad repetitive over the last few months... and you really fixed that with this RP. Great job. It's going to be hard to compete with that.
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Post by patera on Aug 16, 2011 19:16:36 GMT -5
Thank you, CJ. I did try out something new this time around because I was feeling like I was starting to get stale. With a character as cemented as TITAN is, I was confused on how to do that. I figured that I could play on his terrible childhood and turn it into something positive in hopes of going new places with the character. Anybody else?
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Post by jackbull on Aug 16, 2011 23:27:08 GMT -5
Two favourite quotes from that RP.
-- "... not only do I have a chance to once again show the world why I fucking matter… and you don’t..."
-- "I am going to bury that son of a bitch.. And make a tuxedo out of his flesh."
Just made me laugh out loud.
I - like CJ - really loved the section with the dad. In particular I enjoyed the fact that Titan kind of flipped the old paradigm on its head, that he's a bad guy and should be booed. He showed a different side, not quite caring so much as just being angry about a lowlife scumbag. It was a different perspective that added something to Titans character.
As for the Epilogue, I felt it tailed off a little there. It wasn't bad. In fact it was good. But for me it wasn't to the same standard and didn't quite have the same impact as the opening and middle sections.
Just looking at it again, if I had the opportunity to edit it then I would have swapped around certain chunks of the last section and the first section, so that the first section laid the ground work and then the last section really finished on a flying note.
But that's my only real issue with it.
Also just quickly, one of the things I love about Titan RP's is how much you manage to fit in such a small package. That's a skill I really admire and this RP was a good example of it.
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Post by The Sky King on Aug 23, 2011 9:36:25 GMT -5
- Interesting to see TITAN's affiliation with steroids. I somewhat expected to see that built on, but it didn't happen (More on this later). I expect that we'll be seeing something on it later? It's interesting to see TITAN having to resort to an artificial measure to make him stronger.
- One weakness of your RP was that it felt..disjointed. You went from a great opening, to TITAN being injected with steroids, to an encounter in a park with the father, to the epilogue. It didn't really have that flow that I come to expect from a TITAN RP.
- One thing that somewhat threw me off is a thing I see is quite ironically one part of the praise you seem to be getting: The encounter with the father in the park. Now, I know from earlier RPs that TITAN HATES bullies and would obviously confront the father for knowing he beats his child, but the part with TITAN talking to the child just felt...off. It did give TITAN a human quality, but I personally feel TITAN gaining a human quality this far into being a nigh-on unstoppable monster was quite odd. It's not really a serious complaint, I'm probably just not used to seeing TITAN, the behemoth monster, display these human qualities. I can see why he would do it, it just felt off to me.
- A repeat of my usual praises: You still pack that raw intensity in your RPs that astounds me. I wish I could replicate it somehow. It's amazing, and it shows in both TITAN's speech, his monologues, his epilogues..even the descriptions of actions have a gritty, raw feel to them.
- Match relevance was slightly lacking, but strong in where it was implemented. Hand in hand with the good character development meant you had a strong RP throughout. It was a great effort.
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