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Post by danteessick on Aug 16, 2011 23:10:02 GMT -5
Well, I just posted my first RP here - char. dev, and a bit rushed at the end, but I feel it set up the character... well enough.
Any and all feedback on this or any future RP is more than welcomed.
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Post by The Sky King on Aug 23, 2011 9:45:04 GMT -5
- You're certainly right about it setting up the character well enough. A very, very strong introduction to the character and definitely very-interesting. Finding a new life in a wrestling ring and moving away from being a rich kid who happens to be the black sheep of the family gives you some definite good fuel for writing an interesting character. It definitely makes me eager to read your next effort.
- Your writing is pretty amazing. I spotted maybe one typo while reading it, if that. You definitely had a great flow going, that made me somewhat disappointed when the RP ended suddenly. Your descriptions were good, slightly long-winded, but I can definitely understand that being in a character development roleplay, so not really a complaint. You have quite a unique style of narrating the characters thoughts and awareness of his surroundings and situations that's bound to make this character interesting.
Sorry I can't really give more feedback. It was a short RP, but for introducing the character you managed to do it incredibly spot-on. I definitely hope you stick with us here, because you definitely have an interesting character and a heap of potential too. |
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