Body and Soul Feedback

[BodyNSoul]

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First promo is up, there should be two but between two jobs, one calling me in last night for 6 hours, and then my mom getting in a car accident this afternoon so I had to leave my other job early and go to the hospital. She's alright now, just crutches for a month and then PT for at least two months. That's why it kinda cuts out so soon

[The Cobra Viper]

This Rp was fine as an opener the problem is that's all it is. I like what you did with the coding and there were ignorable grammatical errors. You didn't put out a shit story and i look forward to your next one but there were issues that I'm afraid will probably cost you the match. Mainly Match relevance.

We all struggle with it from time to time and while you did reference that your characters had a match you didn't once mention either of your opponents.

With what happened in your life it's understandable but you wanted feedback and i want to see you rock the next show with your writing. So best of luck in the future these were my two cents.

[BodyNSoul]

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New promo up. I like it cuz it's dives deeper into the relationship between TJ and Travis. I know it's not that match related to this week, but that's what the second will be more for.

[BodyNSoul]

That's what I use to do, but between an episode in PWH and ACW's style, I kinda fell out of doing the multi-part RPs.

The coding I'm still figuring out for Travis as he's a new character. I like to have my characters a specific color, maybe a lighter blue will work.