The End of Everything.

[James]

Again, I usually don't ask for feedback 'cause I don't give it out enough. Same as I did at Back 2 Roots I'll try my best to give out feedback this weekend 'cause I'm asking for it here.

For the past year and a half, Mark Rivera and Dante Holly have been synonymous with one another. I believe it is just him and Mr. Luck that were on both The Council and The Empire and Mr. Luck joined The Council near the end of the line. In addition to this, he has feuded on end with Toby Hunter/Oblivion, seeing him as the end to his means so to speak.

With everything turned Topsy-Turvy, I tried this week to really, really emphasize the change in Dante, not by telling it but showing it. To that end I am curious as to what people thought of a serious Dante Holly that recognizes the brevity of the situation but is also seeking desperately to make ammends to Oblivion who has essentially fought for the same as him for so long, just on different sides.

In addition, match relevance with him is a bitch but I'm curious as to what people thought of it. I also sincerely hope the length does not throw anyone off. I struggled incredibly with this piece and getting the idea from head to word processor (I had Robin, Roy and Obi sign off early in the role playing period if anyone doubts the validity of this) but once I got too writing it flowed to the point where it became my longest role play ever. I sincerely hope this is a one time occurrence with Dante.

I'll thank everyone for reading this miniature essay and again, I'll all but promise to give out some feedback on Sunday as I laugh at the misery of everyone else having to recover from two days of binge drinking.

Cheers,

James.

[primetime]

Your rp this week was amazing. I loved the character interaction. This is the type of thing that has made you famous, bro. You are a grade A writer, and this effort proved it. I especially loved your take on Oblivion. (Maybe you could be a ghost writer for the character when Obi retires this summer?)

The only way you will lose is because someone straight up beat you.. not because you held anything back or did something wrong. I enjoyed your RP fully.

[irobin]

I really did enjoy your roleplay, Dante, and I will vouch for the fact that you approached me early on about this piece.

This piece had some very good character interaction and it's definitely the dawn of a new Dante, he's been stongly affected by his exposure to Oblivion and it's coming out now. Dante was always fighting the "good fight" as he saw it, but now he can see it through clearer eyes and his resolve seems to be stronger than ever. It's a powerful sense of urgency from Dante because he wants to make up for his recent failings, even if he could argue that he had been tricked and it wasn't his fault. He's taken it all to heart and wants to prove that he is the real hero of the EUW.

The length isn't an issue at all and it has some first rate dialogue, even the characters that aren't your own seem to be well-written and natural, that's something that's impressive, too. You said you wanted Dante to be serious, and to want to make amends, well, both of those things came through strongly in this roleplay and as far as I'm concerned, it's a really good piece, probably only topped by your work against Oblivion at B2R.

[jackbull]

I really enjoyed your latest RP. I like especially the way that Dante is almost growing up. It was a nice touch to see him getting a little angry and to see that he took the lesson that Obi taught him and tried to make something of it, make a statement of his intent. I also had to cherry pick some quotes, because I love these;

"Minstrels will sing of the coming days..." - This just made me laugh.

"Jace smiles at May as she blushes back, knowing full well his intentions.

Dante - “Do not forget to wash behind your ears, o' partner of mine. It would not do us well if you suffered from potatoes growing behind your ears.”" - But this had me cracking up. I have no idea why, I just thought it was hilarious.

"Dante - “I need you to conduct an interview for me, in the ubiquitous words of Randy Moss 'ya'll had two weeks to do ya' talkin' let me do mine!”" - You can't go wrong with a bit of Randy Moss. Unless you trade a third round pick for him.

"Dante - “This is how tough guys talk!”

Sarah - “But you're not a tough guy.”" - Probably one of the better dialogue exchanges I've seen from anyone in a while. It was simple, but funny as hell.

"... he knows about the dojo and the first rule of the dojo is you don't talk about the dojo. That's how you can tell I'm going to take care of business Jack because I'm breaking the rules!" - There was something goofy and very Dante Holly about this. Pretty damn funny.

".... hiding like a dragon maestro because the popular belief is that dragon's no longer exist, but then you came out of the closet. You revealed your true colors and just like Cyndi Lauper you can tell that's why certain fans love you especially when we were just in San Fransisco.”" - Just... I can't explain how much this made me chuckle.

"... will have you know that he was the tenth longest reigning television champion once upon a time where as you are simply the eleventh longest reigning Pure Champion." - I love this because it's a great twist on an otherwise common theme and very clever writing.

Overall then, a very good RP.