New chapter is up let me know what you guys think

[Bane]

hey everyone the new Bane RP is up let me know what you guys really think about this one.

[jackbull]

I thought it was good.

I liked finding out more about Bane, his past, the raid. The bit about his drinking problems was good, it adds a new layer to the character, something deep and potentially dangerous that you can build on in the future.

We're also starting to learn more and more about what ultimately drove Bane to leave the force and turn him to pro wrestling.

The bit about beating up the suspect was an added treat, as it relays to us the fact that sometimes Bane has difficulty controlling his temper.

The only point I would call you on is when you do characters speech, have their names at the start of their speech so we know who it is talking straight away.

So instead of:

sadfhhjgfhjsdgfhjgfjsdf - Bane

Try maybe:

Bane - SHDGJHSGDJHgadjh

Cysco - jkhsdfjkghksjdfgh

I always find that easier because we know straight away then who is talking and it helps to keep track of the conversation a little easier.

Other than that small thing though, I thought it was a really good RP.

[primetime]

Great job this week, dude. I appreciate your hard work every show. You never let a loss get to you. We all could learn from your resolve, friend. This week was one of your best pieces.

[James]

I'm going to disagree with Jaden in that it wasn't one your best role plays with this character, it was the best. There's a part of me that is still partial to 415 given the number of times that I worked with him but I do think Bane is a much better character. You have an innate gift into making your characters human. Too many of us have superhero's (not in a Dante Holly sense) or come off as incredibly corny or cliche when we try it but there's a genuine quality to Bane that really makes me empathize with him, even when he's beating a suspect, even though he has a drinking problem. It all comes together into a flawed character that you can't help but support because he's you and he's me.

[Bane]

Thanks everyone 4 your help and support. I really appreashiate the help and support from everyone.