Damaged Goods Feedback!

[Damaged Goods]

Hello everyone. I would like to first off, thank you for even reading my next series of characters here in the EUW. My team "Damaged Goods" is a sort of new thing for me. I have always wanted to work in a tag team so I am pretty excited about this opportunity. My opponents this week are the tag team champions themselves, the LVC. I would like to wish them the best of luck as I have no doubt that the best team will win.

On that note, I welcome any feedback from all of our members here. Of course, I will return the favor in kind. I am not trying to push humor with this team or seriousness of any kind. This is the story of two men who are new to the business on a professional level. They are growing as wrestlers and as far as maturity. So, this feels like a challenge as a writer to me. I look forward to it.

Thank you in advance to anyone who takes the time to review my work. My first story arc will be a lengthy one entitled: Dirty Deeds.

Chapter One: www.euw23.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=rpsnv&action=display&thread=5919

Chapter Two: www.euw23.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=rpsnv&thread=5922

[Mr. C]

I really like them, Obi! They feel very real. It's a whole new perspective being taken. A lot of people write about training and preparing for the matches, and these show a whole different perspective on it, the day-to-day "real" stuff, I suppose. It's written just as well as your work for TiTAN, but it's a subject matter that really pulls you in to the characters. No offense meant, but it's kind of like a reality TV show! Very cool, I want to read more!

I don't have any criticism as it stands now. The characters are well defined and have definite personalities, and the writing is clear and entertaining. My only complaint is having to wait for the next one!

[Damaged Goods]

Thank you, Tommy! This week has been hell so I haven't had the chance to read your rp yet. Let me do that now and return the favor to you.

If anyone else would like to leave any notes for me, feel free. I will also return the favor in kind to you as well.

[irobin]

I thoroughly enjoyed these two pieces and felt that they flowed very well together. Effectively, the past adventures of Damaged Goods now seem to be classed as the prologue, with the real story starting now. If these are the first real chapters of their story, then you’ve got me hooked because this is really interesting stuff. Everyone here knows that you’re a good writer, so it should come as no surprise, but I’m still impressed. To be able to pick up two characters almost as new and write such polished pieces, it’s really incredible to see.

The roleplays themselves were impressive stuff and right on the money. They’re exactly the kind of quality that would be expected of any team challenging the champions and I truly cannot find fault with them. You’ve got your match focus in, plenty of character development and good writing. I mean it, I cannot find fault with this pieces, the two of them are truly fantastic and they show Damaged Goods as a team with big goals and the drive and determination to reach them, if not now; in future.

It’s also interesting to see Terry Jones getting involved once again. He’s got a history of being a guy that makes champions, but the DG boys don’t seem like his usual fare, nor does he seem like the kind of manager that they would necessarily choose. I want to know where this is going, because it’s got a lot of possibilities at this stage, much like the whole of Damaged Goods. As I said before, it feels like a beginning, their story is only just starting to be told.

[Skye]

hehe, I love seeing Terry Jones resurfacing to stick his fingers into another "pie" so to speak.
I too look forward to seeing where this goes.

One of the toughest things about your RPs are waiting for the next ones, when reaching the end of the latest.

[Christian Kane]

Apr 30, 2011 5:59:11 GMT -5 Skye said:

hehe, I love seeing Terry Jones resurfacing to stick his fingers into another "pie" so to speak.

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