Help a new guy out?

[Church]

Locker Room RP, kinda giving some insight into Church pre-EUW:

www.euw23.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=lockerroom&thread=5717

Any suggestions for the content, writing style, formatting would be greatly appreciated guys. I'll definitely try to take whatever critique you have to heart when writing my RP for B2R

[Obi]

Okay, I am liking this character. Very good debut roleplay from you. The story had me interested throughout and the writing was on point. I see big things from you here.

Oh and for the record... SoA > The Shield.

[irobin]

The roleplay was good, it's interesting to see a guy coming into this and being that "average" guy that's trying to make some money. A sort of "common man" character that stands out against the superstars and monsters that make up the ranks of most wrestling federations.

I like the character and the roleplay was good, well-written and interesting. I'm certainly keen to see where this all goes.