Eddie's Feedback Thread

[Diabolik]

Okay, yeah, this is for any feedback for Eddie. Might as well jump on this particular bandwagon instead of making a new thread every RP.

So, what did you all think?

Personally, I liked it, apart from the match relevance which I threw on at the end for the sake of, well, needing it. For me, it seemed forced, the way it was thrown on at the end.

Did anyone else feel that way? Let me know what you all think.

[Mr. C]

It was a fun read, and it's a neat dynamic to see Eddie Laurel working in to the gimmick he's been dealt. But I can definitely see what you mean about the match relevance. The RP was being written quite well with great descriptions and it had me pulled in to it, but then it took a 180 in the last few paragraphs and didn't seem to have a true end. Perhaps even one more paragraph after just to tie off the scene would have been good. But all in all, it was enjoyable and grand writing as it lasted. Each piece separately was done well, it just ended before I felt it should have, and didn't end in a way I thought worked best.