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my rp's
Dec 2, 2010 16:51:07 GMT -5
Post by Hard Times on Dec 2, 2010 16:51:07 GMT -5
To everyone on the EUW roster, I was wondering if you guys can leave me feedback on mu rp's from here on out. Like what you like about them, what I should add or change. Your feedback good or bad will help me become a better writer for our company and for myself.
Thanks, Angel Valdez
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my rp's
Dec 2, 2010 17:59:04 GMT -5
Post by Mr. C on Dec 2, 2010 17:59:04 GMT -5
I think your RPs are written well. I like that you're very much in the character's head, the first person perspective on the thoughts is entertaining, and it makes sense. I enjoy seeing how he feels and how he plans.
But with that said, that's all there has been to the RPs - until this week. The addition at the end of this week's RP was a welcome addition. It's cool to write the character's thoughts but to me, there needs to be a little something more, and you took a step in the right direction this week with the second half of your RP. The new dynamic of seeing how he interacts with his family beyond just his thoughts about them was great. But perhaps there could be more to it?
I'm not going to tell you what to do, but I hope telling you what I liked was enough to give you some direction. You have a brilliant grasp of who the character is, so I want you to shape the writing by yourself, too.
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