Feedback: Daddy is Back

[Commissioner Warrior™]

Daddy is Back! ;D I actually wrote this roleplay a week or so ago, but I wasn't going to post it yet because of course it would've spoiled the surprise. Basically it explains why I'm coming back, and gave me a chance to brush up on some rust.

I've taken a new approach, which so far I'm enjoying. And that's writing everything from Kendra's perspective. So I'd love some feedback, even if just opinions or whatever about it and the way it flows/sounds/what you think.

Say something playah!

Please and thanks.

[CJ]

I enjoyed it alot, man. Very cool with going with the view from the daughter for the most part. You seem to have a grip on your characters back story. Glad to have you around.. again I guess? Keep up the good work!

[Commissioner Warrior™]

Thanks, that's what I was going for. And yeah, don't even try to get my whole back story, it's become so ridiculous over the years, hah. And yeah, thanks. It's nice to hear some feedback, and nice to hear from someone who's unfamiliar with my work. (And yeah, again. Not for quite some time though, hah.)

Anyone else?