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Post by The Sky King on Oct 9, 2011 7:13:26 GMT -5
Favourite Match:
Favourite Superstar:
Favourite Segment:
Overall, how well was your character written? (/10)
How well was the show written? (/10)
Any Other Thoughts?
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((NOTE: I'm purposefully keeping the feedback topic short in order to hopefully inspire more people to leave feedback, something important for me as my first show as owner. As always, both positive and negative feedback is welcomed.))
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 9:36:22 GMT -5
Favourite Match: The main event, definitely. It soundly represented both characters as threats, and even had me second-guessing the result a couple of times.
Favourite Superstar: Maynard. I loved reading his work, and it's a shame he got pulled... but Goddamn, did he ever get his thoughts out before he did!
Favourite Segment: Maynard getting fired, and the ensuing aftermath with Rivera and the Board of Directors. I am a bit baffled as to why Ashen, whom has proven to be incompetent at times, is being hailed as the board's only hope-- especially since he's been established as a heel on the same level as Rivera-- but we'll see where this is going to lead.
Overall, how well was your character written? (/10) - Natalie rates a 9.2 out of ten-- she wouldn't have used Roy's first name, but that's a minor flaw, and not something that really detracts from the character at large since she was a bit flustered while trying to hide it and, understandably, can be forgiven for not being entirely perfect in her ettiquette. There's also how she called the Lionheart Title the Pure Title, for some reason... but eh, it's nothing major.
Skyler, on the other hand... 4/10, and the run of me being greatly displeased at how she is being written as a willing accomplice when she is anything but continues. She is meant to loathe the man that is essentially dangling the answer she wants more than anything in front of her, not act as someone that'd go to bat for Xplode beyond the bare minimum-- he would've needed to tell her repeatedly to get the hammer rather than her just fetching it like a good little, loyal pet, for example. She also should've been reluctant to begin taking Skye apart, needing to be repeatedly told on that front again since I established, in her promo, that she didn't want to do it. I can see where an attempt was made to tweak what was written into something that actually represents the character was made, but it's still rather far away from what I am aiming for with her. Here's hoping that it will improve.[/i][/color]
How well was the show written? (9.5/10) Ignoring my thoughts on how Skyler was written? I noticed a few minor flaws, a spelling mistake or two, but the real reason I'm giving this score is that there's still notably different writing tones throughout. Unify those together into one solid collective and you'll be ace, as they say across the pond.
Also, one major gaffe I noticed; where, exactly, was Tenfold stripped of the Lionheart Title? Rivera references it, but it's never seen happening.
Any Other Thoughts? This depends upon when the results are written, but if you're writing the matches after roleplay deadline, I think it would be a great idea to try to write the matches with some thought as to how the competitors involved promoed-- not so much based on effort, but more focused on the idea of what they put across. Having Skyler be reluctant to hurt Skye at first, for example, or if someone says they want to break someone's neck? Write them as pulling out all the stops to try to pull it off. Doing that would make for more accurate character portrayal.
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Post by dragon on Oct 9, 2011 19:41:25 GMT -5
Edited again: Obi is right. Sorry, Kris. I owe you an oreo cookie or something.
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Post by Obi on Oct 9, 2011 19:45:43 GMT -5
These feedback threads are bullshit. They always turn into a passive aggressive shit flinging competition...
Anyway, great job, Phil. Great job to whomever else wrote their matches. Lastly, thank you to anyone including Jaden, who took the time to help Phil with anything in the show. Considering the situation, it must have been tough.
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 19:51:56 GMT -5
These feedback threads are bullshit. They always turn into a passive aggressive shit flinging competition... Passive-aggressive? So for me to point out something that I didn't like without flinging around insults equates to being passive-aggressive? Fine.
*ahem*
TOBY, YOU SMELL LIKE CHEESE!
Better?
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 19:54:25 GMT -5
Thank you, Sabs. Much appreciated.
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Post by Obi on Oct 9, 2011 19:54:53 GMT -5
These feedback threads are bullshit. They always turn into a passive aggressive shit flinging competition... Passive-aggressive? So for me to point out something that I didn't like without flinging around insults equates to being passive-aggressive? Fine.
*ahem*
TOBY, YOU SMELL LIKE CHEESE!
Better? lol,
You know me. I just call it straight how I see it. I didn't intend for my reply to be directed at you alone, Jaden is also a butthead. You're my favorite Kris either way. My question to you is this? Is it stinky bad cheese?
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 19:57:59 GMT -5
Passive-aggressive? So for me to point out something that I didn't like without flinging around insults equates to being passive-aggressive? Fine.
*ahem*
TOBY, YOU SMELL LIKE CHEESE!
Better? lol,
You know me. I just call it straight how I see it. I didn't intend for my reply to be directed at you alone, Jaden is also a butthead. You're my favorite Kris either way. My question to you is this? Is it stinky bad cheese? You smell like feta cheese!
...which I have some in my fridge that is destined for stuffed mushrooms. Omnomnomnom.
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Post by dragon on Oct 9, 2011 19:58:46 GMT -5
I edited my post.
Oh.. and Kris and Obi? You guys are ANNOYING!!
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Post by Obi on Oct 9, 2011 20:00:23 GMT -5
lol,
You know me. I just call it straight how I see it. I didn't intend for my reply to be directed at you alone, Jaden is also a butthead. You're my favorite Kris either way. My question to you is this? Is it stinky bad cheese? You smell like feta cheese!
...which I have some in my fridge that is destined for stuffed mushrooms. Omnomnomnom. Perfect! Cheese is yummy isn't it? ;D
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 20:00:35 GMT -5
I edited my post. Oh.. and Kris and Obi? You guys are ANNOYING!! Aww, someone's jealous that he's not the more attractive brother!
...*hides behind Toby*
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Post by Obi on Oct 9, 2011 20:01:50 GMT -5
I edited my post. Oh.. and Kris and Obi? You guys are ANNOYING!! Aww, someone's jealous that he's not the more attractive brother!
...*hides behind Toby* hahaha! I can just picture him now with that constipated look on his face. ;D
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 20:01:56 GMT -5
You smell like feta cheese!
...which I have some in my fridge that is destined for stuffed mushrooms. Omnomnomnom. Perfect! Cheese is yummy isn't it? ;D Y'damn right it is.
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Post by The Sky King on Oct 9, 2011 20:04:18 GMT -5
Alright, time for me to quit hiding and wade in. 1) Honest feedback is good feedback. In all honesty, i'd rather have harsh feedback than overtly-positive feedback. It gives me a lot more to work with. 2) Skylers character, and anyone ELSES FOR THAT MATTER (Cough fucking cough.), will be addressed and hopefully...'repaired' (For lack of a better word.) in the next show. With my arse now firmly in the driving seat, and with some semblance of a timetable sorted for University, I can keep an eagle-eye on happenings here in terms of characters. Trust me, as a writer, I hated my character not being used right. I went through years as Meltdown where he didn't seem to even have a gimmick (Even though I gave him one.). As an owner, I plan to fix this (Although it didn't appear to be much of a problem under Jaden's rule.) Mistakes are made. To err is to human. That's not an excuse, however. Any and all issues can be and will be addressed. That I promise. 3) Any Other Thoughts? This depends upon when the results are written, but if you're writing the matches after roleplay deadline, I think it would be a great idea to try to write the matches with some thought as to how the competitors involved promoed-- not so much based on effort, but more focused on the idea of what they put across. Having Skyler be reluctant to hurt Skye at first, for example, or if someone says they want to break someone's neck? Write them as pulling out all the stops to try to pull it off. Doing that would make for more accurate character portrayal. The problem with this (And this is not meant as a dig at anyone) is that a lot of the RPs come in during the two days leading up to the deadline. The Staff, meanwhile, strive to write matches out during the first week/As soon as possible. Essentially, the show is already practically written (Segments and all) before we start to see a lot of the RP's come out. If anyone RP's early, we will do our best to make sure they have a mindset similar to how they portray their own in their roleplay. 4) The Tenfold issue in the results has been fixed. It may not seem like it, but changes here are now a daily occurrance. The fed is changing swiftly, and it's my job to keep my hands on the wheel to stop it from crashing spectacularly. As such, I do make the occasional error. ..Odins beard. I write this message out and suddenly there's an extra six posts when I go to post it. Talking about cheese. If I hadn't been in the EUW for several years, this would actually seem weird to me.
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 20:06:46 GMT -5
...*feeds Luck a piece of cheese*
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Post by patera on Oct 9, 2011 20:07:19 GMT -5
If it helps.... My living situation is vastly better. My wife and I are really working on shit. So, TITAN is not going anywhere. Consider him active after Prestige and beyond. So Cross... IT IS ON!!!!!
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Post by kris on Oct 9, 2011 20:13:29 GMT -5
The problem with this (And this is not meant as a dig at anyone) is that a lot of the RPs come in during the two days leading up to the deadline. The Staff, meanwhile, strive to write matches out during the first week/As soon as possible. Essentially, the show is already practically written (Segments and all) before we start to see a lot of the RP's come out. If anyone RP's early, we will do our best to make sure they have a mindset similar to how they portray their own in their roleplay. Aah, fair enough. I know that some staffs wait until after deadline to start writing-- for whatever reason-- so I figured it was a suggestion worth throwing out there. You've come up with a good compromise, I think.
...*feeds another piece of cheese to*
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Post by Mr. C on Oct 10, 2011 6:44:07 GMT -5
If it helps.... My living situation is vastly better. My wife and I are really working on shit. So, TITAN is not going anywhere. Consider him active after Prestige and beyond. So Cross... IT IS ON!!!!! AGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAGHHHH I DON'T KNOW WHAT WE'RE YELLING ABOOOUUUUT!
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Post by The Cobra Viper on Oct 10, 2011 9:52:21 GMT -5
Okay sorry for the delay
Favourite Match: Skyler vs Skye
Favourite Superstar: The Doc
Favourite Segment: Hetfield's dismissal
Overall, how well was your character written? (5.5/10) While Roy was written decently well: word choice and a few mannerisms. Nothing note worthy Peter and Shamus not so much. First Shamus is Peter's father, not brother. Second Shamus doesn't go to the top rope he's the only one of the group not to. The rest is stuff i haven't addressed for the group and that's my fault. I haven't developed them enough and i'm fine with the rest of the small things i need to explain first in my writing before expecting the staff to get it. So while the score is low I am taking the blame for the majority of it
How well was the show written? (8.5/10)
It was different as expected but overall good. Nat brought up my main concern, Danny. for the most part i didn't see major issues or complications but for once it felt like a weekly or standard show. Not a ppv. Jaden i love you but every show was a ppv when i started. Phil i like the fact that it felt like a televised show. At first i didn't and that's why i waited . I fully expected the same style and feel and when i first read through the results i was left wanting more. then i sat and thought and realized why i felt that way. So yes at first i would have said a 5/10 but now i think the score reflects what i truly feel. Its a new day and you are different. and different is good.
Any Other Thoughts? well on a personal level i need to revision Roy's feud with Danny. Lol overall: just straighten out the title scenes, feuds, and set up matches for prestige. Other than that i see no major "must handle issues"
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Post by Skye on Oct 10, 2011 11:10:10 GMT -5
Favourite Match: Skyler vs NatI think you must have meant Skye vs Skyler Skyler and Nat are both Kris's characters Skye is mine. This was an issue in writing the match as well - Skyler and Skye were interchanged a couple of times resulting in Skyler doing damage to herself. I might have more feedback later, when I can read the rest of the show more fully (I'm at work, as usual for a Monday)
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